As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In all actuality, I think it is more probable that our bodies will surely deteriorate long before our minds do in any significant amount. Who can't say that technology has made us lazier, but that's the key word, lazy, not stupid. The ever increasing amount of technology that we incorporate into our daily lives makes people think and learn every day, possibly more than ever before. our abilities to think, learn, philosophize, etc. may even reach limits never dreamed of before by average people. using technology to solve problems will continue to help us realize our potential as a human race.
If you think about it, using technology to solve more complicating problems gives humans a chance to expand their thinking and learning, opening up whole new worlds for many people. many of these people are glad for the chance to expand their horizons by learning more, going to new places, and trying new things. If it wasn't for the invention of new technological devices, I wouldn't be sitting at this computer trying to philosophize about technology. it would be extremely hard for children in much poorer countries to learn and think for themselves with out the invention of the internet. think what an impact the printing press, a technologically superior mackine at the time, had on the ability of the human race to learn and think.
Right now we are seeing a golden age of technology, using it all the time during our every day lives. When we get up there's instant coffee and the microwave and all these great things that help us get ready for our day. but we aren't allowing our minds to deteriorate by using them, we are only making things easier for ourselves and saving time for other important things in our days. going off to school or work in our cars instead of a horse and buggy. think of the brain power and genius that was used to come up with that single invention that has changed the way we move across this globe.
using technology to solve our continually more complicated problems as a human race is definately a good thing. our ability to think for ourselves isn't deteriorating, it's continuing to grow, moving on to higher though functions and more ingenious ideas. The ability to use what technology we have is an example
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...minds do in any significant amount. Who cant say that technology has made us lazier,...
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Suggestion: that's
...that technology has made us lazier, but thats the key word, lazy, not stupid. The eve...
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Suggestion: Our
...ry day, possibly more than ever before. our abilities to think, learn, philosophize...
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...er dreamed of before by average people. using technology to solve problems will conti...
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Suggestion: Many
...ng up whole new worlds for many people. many of these people are glad for the chance...
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Suggestion: wasn't
...ew places, and trying new things. If it wasnt for the invention of new technological ...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...vention of new technological devices, I wouldnt be sitting at this computer trying to p...
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Suggestion: It
...rying to philosophize about technology. it would be extremely hard for children in...
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...tries to learn and think for themselves with out the invention of the internet. think wh...
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...ing our every day lives. When we get up theres instant coffee and the microwave and al...
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Suggestion: But
...ngs that help us get ready for our day. but we arent allowing our minds to deterior...
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...t help us get ready for our day. but we arent allowing our minds to deteriorate by us...
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...for other important things in our days. going off to school or work in our cars inste...
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Suggestion: Think
... our cars instead of a horse and buggy. think of the brain power and genius that was ...
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...d the way we move across this globe. using technology to solve our continually mor...
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Suggestion: Our
... human race is definately a good thing. our ability to think for ourselves isnt det...
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Suggestion: isn't
...ing. our ability to think for ourselves isnt deteriorating, its continuing to grow, ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...think for ourselves isnt deteriorating, its continuing to grow, moving on to higher...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74744897959 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56922965384 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55612244898 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.82315302 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9473684211 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.31578947368 5.21951772744 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273975565019 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886955338743 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637360626751 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177475009121 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733518674178 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.