People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The speaker asserts that people’s behavior is effected by forces. There are some kinds of people who are follow their way without influencing by others. However, these people are minority in the world. In my point of view, family, peer’s surrounding, and society have considerable effect on people. Therefore, I strongly agree with the speaker.
To begin with, family has effect on our hobby, choice of vocation, and value system. As parents’ children, people imitate their parent’s behavior, and eager to follow their parents’ vocation. If their parents are doctors, they have a higher possibility to be a doctor as well in the future. With parents’ assistance, children can follow their way, fulfilling them to facilitate development of vocation in the future. Also In the process of learning value system and skill development, parents play a crucial roles; For ensuring that children can form a positive value system, parents have to point out the negative behavior. In sum, people’s behavior is affected by family.
Secondly, peer pressure exercise an influence on our choice, since mainstream influences our behavior overwhelmingly, including study, vocation, and hobby. When studying at school, students stay with others for a long time. Due to long time getting along with classmate, students’ behavior is affected by each other; Classmate’s study, vocational planning, and hobby will influence us. For instance, When students applied the major in the university, peer’s decision will cause an effect on students. In a word, people’s behavior is influenced by peer easily.
Finally, society has an influence on people’s behavior, since law and culture are also influence our behavior and choice. living in the country, people have to follow the law, and the culture of the country. The country’s law cause a restriction on people. In some countries, people have no freedom of speech, and they are incapable of giving opinion easily. Whereas in other countries having freedom of speech, people can give their opinion without any restrictions. In brief, society has an effect on people’s behavior.
To sum up, family, peer’s surrounding, and society has influence on people’s behavior. As a result, I totally agree with what the speaker says.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... forces. There are some kinds of people who are follow their way without influencing by...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'followed'.
Suggestion: followed
... There are some kinds of people who are follow their way without influencing by others...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to value'
Suggestion: to value
...future. Also In the process of learning value system and skill development, parents p...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
...ill development, parents play a crucial roles; For ensuring that children can form a ...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d hobby will influence us. For instance, When students applied the major in the u...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'influenced'.
Suggestion: influenced
...ehavior, since law and culture are also influence our behavior and choice. living in the ...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Living
...also influence our behavior and choice. living in the country, people have to follow t...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, in brief, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42857142857 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85991791416 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515406162465 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2180687696 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.75 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.875 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136520712731 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491641024133 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283688998279 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0858440382904 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195223835455 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.