People’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement claims that people’s behavior is mainly determined by external forces such as the society. People are social animals and we are raised in a society by certain notions. The claim is therefore reasonable.
How people react to certain circumstances is largely accredited to how they are raised by the society based on the values and beliefs passed on from generations to generations. Take collectivism and individualism for instance. People from China are more reserved and values a group as a whole and tend to disregard individuals’ benefits. By contrast, those from the United States generally value and reward individually for their hard work. The difference in the two type of behaviors is determined by the social values based on which people are raised.
Also, people’s behavior is to a great degree affected by particular circumstances. People oftentimes have their belief on certain things such as sexual orientation and moral standards. However, they do not always show how they feel. In other words, they behave differently due to the external situation. For example, one extremely opposes to same-sex marriage on account of religious beliefs. Nonetheless, he would still congratulate a same-sex couple on their wedding for sake of social appropriateness.
One way argue that people have free wills and decided what to do. For example, being invited to a birthday party, though must study for the exam the next day, one can decide to go to the party or stay at home studying. People make choices like this all the time in daily life. At first glance, people’s behavior is greatly determined by themselves, internal factors. Nevertheless, it is not so. Think of it, people make their decision for certain reasons. As in the aforementioned example, one may decide to go to the party because the birthday girl is her best friend. Though she has to study for the exam, she is obligated to attend the party. Yet, she may decide not to go and believe that study is the priority, which is a belief installed in her by her family and the education system. Though it seems that people decide what to do based on their free will, it is in fact determined by forces of not their own.
In conclusion, people are like a white paper when they are born, the society is the artist. The final panting is what people grow into with all the values and beliefs passed on from generations and educated by the society which is deep-set and determines people’s behavior.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The arguments are correct. but you may pay attention to the writing styles. We realized that the Automated_readability_index is low because you used a lot of simple sentences and they are pretty short. for example:
Think of it, people make their decision for certain reasons. As in the aforementioned example, one may decide to go to the party because the birthday girl is her best friend. Though she has to study for the exam, she is obligated to attend the party. Yet, she may decide not to go and believe that study is the priority, which is a belief installed in her by her family and the education system.
according to the formula from this page:
http://www.testbig.com/forum/automated-readability-index
it will get a lower readability score.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2001 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.787 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.259 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.265 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.455 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Okay. Thank you very much for
Okay. Thank you very much for the info! I will pay attention to the issue.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00717703349 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89955804768 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495215311005 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5805111628 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0769230769 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19230769231 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179864286893 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518449000535 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557315889133 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11439066165 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034479131636 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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