When it comes to satisfaction, people in general believe that it lies to a condition when they initially set a goal, contrive a plan and make efforts to accomplish their goal. While their dream eventually comes true, they are full of excitement and content, and that moment is “satisfaction”. Therefore, it depends on people’s dream which generates satisfaction.
To begin with, we, humans, all have our own dreams since living in the current society requires several basic conditions that keep us survived. To illustrate this point, consider the most common goal among societies, to earn money as superfluous as possible. Why we desire money so eagerly? The most significant reason is that living means spending money. Maintaining basic human health, such as eating food, drinking water, or commuting between home and working places, paying electricity bills, water bills, gas bills, phone bills, all of above instances require spending money. Apart from them, it is our instinct to consider save all of our salaries, yet our salaries are not sufficient enough. As a result, the most pervasive dream among our society is to have a lot of money. In order to gain more money, people start to set their individualistic goals to compete for the least arduous but well-paid jobs. When they get such offer, satisfaction teems with them. Hence, achieving personal goals does indeed generate a sense of self-content.
Moreover, when people have sufficient money for them to live in a wealthy life-style, they start to consider their reputation. They covet fame, which lasts through eternity, even when they no longer exist in this world. Therefore, some of them donate money to cities for building libraries named after them, or they donate to academic institution to improve their facilities. Others devote themselves into communities or societies by joining assemblies or associations, such as saving endangered species, arousing societies to conserve resources or energy, or simply clearing our costal lines together. All of them could serve as a step stone for establishing their name, or fame, forever. This is because in their mind, serving for others, or the public does actually have more joy and delight than accomplishing self-centered goals. Individual dreams are not comparable to the necessity of the public.
In conclusion, not only did contribute to the family, the community or society as a whole could acquire satisfaction, but also did achieve individualistic goal could as well.
- People today are too individualistic. Instead of pursuing self-centered, separate goals, people need to understand that satisfaction comes from working for the greater good of the family, the Community or society as a whole. 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3040201005 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01410893221 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595477386935 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.740449438202 540% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.541586582 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.523809524 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134331635495 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375176147494 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301001326893 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862428580614 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127863136059 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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