People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
People’s behaviors, results of conscious thinking and unconscious intuition, are largely determined by genetic composition and cultural influences. We inherit genes from our parents and acquire cultural cognizance from our society, which are both forces not of our own making. Nonetheless, by learning, experiencing and reflecting more, people can still make some changes to their own behaviors.
According to neuroscience, human behavior is the consequence of intertwined influence of both cognitive and affective systems. Cognitive system helps us understand this item in front of us called ice-cream can help us cool down in summer but can also increase the sugar and calorie taking of the day. Affective system soon shows anxiety then disgust by the possibility of getting fat. Hence the behavior of rejecting the ice-cream in the end.
To analyze further, cognitive and affective systems are directly controlled by genetic uniqueness and social environment.
Genetically speaking, same incidents arouse different behaviors in different person. Some people tend to be more cautious, yet others might tend to be more audacious. Some students find the pleasure in persistent trying on solving challenging tasks, others get frustrated and bored. Researchers have mostly agreed that most behaviors are inherent which are embedded in our genes.
Despite the difference in genes, social environment also plays a critical role in influencing our behavior. In western countries, personal space is very important. When standing in a line, the person behind you will probably stand at least 50 cm away from you. However, in China, personal space is not as emphasized. Having people almost breathing on your neck in public transportation is not a rare thing. This difference is mostly created by social environment in both countries. In China, even though it is uncomfortable being so close to each other, it is very crowded in big cities that we just don’t have enough room for people to keep the ideal distance.
As much as we would like to free will to control our behavior, it is hardly of our own control. It seems to eat the ice-cream or not is up to ourselves, but the cravings for sugar, the ability to resist temptation and the acceptance of being overweight are not up to us. Can we practice and enhance our resistance? Sure we can! but how much change we can make is again up to our genes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...gust by the possibility of getting fat. Hence the behavior of rejecting the ice-cream...
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Line 10, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...nd enhance our resistance? Sure we can! but how much change we can make is again up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, then, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20256410256 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91594834773 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7976184641 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2173913043 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9565217391 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169861059306 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403200954777 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486256571838 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0765742830519 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844562438013 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.