People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
A plant grows according to the environment around it. Likewise, I agree that people behave not by their will, not by their own making but by the forces or circumstances created around them. Whenever a certain force is applied on a substance, the substance changes its state. We being living things we behave in a certain way according to the environment or forces applied.
For instance, I had read a blog about a conversation between a beggar and a man. When the man passed by him, he asked him for money, the man sat beside him and started a conversation. The man asked the beggar about his life. The beggar told him that he begs every day at this place and lives across the street. So, the man asked him, why don’t he do some job and earn money. The beggar replied, I am forced to do this because I have no qualification to get a job, to help feed my family. The beggar was forced to beg not because he wanted to. The need for hunger made him beg.
There are various instances around us when circumstances make us do certain things. A suicide committed by a young girl, studying in Tenth grade, the other day I read a headline in newspaper. For a while I was stunted and confused what would have made her do so. Then I read the whole article, the girl was bullied in her school by her peers. She was afraid to go school again which made her take her life. It’s a sad thing to hear, but have been she not bullied she could have been a happy girl. Someone else behavior forced her take her such a horrible step. A person’s behavior depends on the surrounding as well. He might behave in a certain way at his work place and differently at his home.
People are influenced by the great leaders, whom they admire and follow or are forced by powerful people. For example, Hitler was a powerful man, who made many people follow his path of cruelty. The men who fought along with him didn’t create an environment that was created by Hitler. I completely agree with the fact that a person’s behavior is always under some forces.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
Suggestion: the surrounding environment
A plant grows according to the environment around it. Likewise, I agree that people behave n...
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Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...forced to beg not because he wanted to. The need for hunger made him beg. Ther...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d to. The need for hunger made him beg. There are various instances around us wh...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...hat was created by Hitler. I completely agree with the fact that a person's behavior is always unde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, so, then, well, while, as for, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46684350133 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52945276198 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527851458886 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.0252035822 60.3974514979 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.36 118.986275619 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 15.08 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119330018848 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351762264841 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594880782369 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835919203307 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606347846038 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 14.1392134831 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.8420337079 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.05 12.1639044944 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.38706741573 80% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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