The speaker believed that external factors constitute the determinate force in people’s decision making instead of their own wills. I concede that outside factors are considerably important, but people’s own minds are the key of their behavior. Thus I tend to disagree with the claim.
Admittedly, extraneous factors play an important part in fostering the behavior of people. Take family influence for example, we all know how great the impact family has on us. An old saying goes, “like father, like son.” In fact, it is partly genetic and partly environmentally. Consider a kid grow up with single parent, which unfortunately set a bad example for the kid as an irresponsible mother or father who doesn’t care about the kid except for government allowance subtitled to single parenthood, there would be great chance for the kid to also become an irresponsible adult, as he might drop out of school at early age, have trouble in maintain healthy relationship with partner due to lack of experience for proper family relationship. There are numerous cases in real life that show troubling adults who were brought up in dysfunctional families.
Though we cannot ignore the outside issues which impact individual’s behavior, it is actually the person’s very own decision to how to behavior. In other words, he might not know how to get along with people as a result of problematic parenting, but he still has to chance to learn it from other sources. Indeed, nobody is born perfectly with everything they deserve, everyone has to learn through their life how to be a better human being. It is definitely wrong to blame everything else instead of oneself for inappropriate behavior whatsoever. Can a serial killer blame the divorce of his parents for his killing innocent people? Can drug abuser blame the disinterestedness of society for his self-indulgence? In my view, obviously not. In fact, it is ourselves who should be ultimately responsible for our behaviors.
Another issue related to the claim is that by what extent the behavior of people is dependent on extraneous forces, I tend to consider that the influence of environmental factors on us is not infinite, but limited. We, ourselves always hold the choice to leave an unhealthy environment or poisoning people surround us. It is always up to us to decide who we want to be.
Finally, to summarize, I disagree with the speaker. And I Think it is up to us to determine our own behavior no matter what situation we might be in.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...wn minds are the key of their behavior. Thus I tend to disagree with the claim. A...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, so, still, thus, as to, except for, for example, i think, in fact, as a result, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06937799043 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09526205549 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557416267943 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 89.2713766266 60.3974514979 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196969574617 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602630024846 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514413213102 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126740296623 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610704386813 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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