The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Over the past century, the advancements in technology have been happening at an extremely fast pace. These advancements helped mankind to realize the dreams which were once considered chimerical. These advancements have been multifarious : some helped to make humans more productive and there have been some other advancements which helped humans explore new possibilities. while I do agreee to some extent that advancements in technology increases the people's efficiency, I disagree with the assumption that making more leisure time is the primary gaol of these new inventions and advancements for two reasons.
To begin, If the humans in the recent past , after inventing a small piece of technology which resulted in an increase in people's efficiency, became complacent and wasted their leisure time, would the today's world be what it is today? I think that it is imperative for the mankind to keep innovating by taking the help of past advancements. For example, before the invention of a calculator, humans used to perform the calculations entirely with the help of a pen and paper. Once the caluclators became the mainstream devices for performing calculations, the efficiency of the people has definitely increased and people would have got some leisure time. However, using this calculator , man used his ability to perform much more complex operations to discover and innovate further rather than sitting idle.
Furthermore, not all the advancements are aimed at increasing the people's efficiencty. There are some advancements done which aid the very existence of human beings. For example, without the advancements in medical science, the life expectancy of a person would not have increased from low 50s in the past to high 60s today. In the past, there were virtually no cures of many of the diseases and people used to succumb to what we consider a minor illness in today's world. However, the medical science has advanced to an extent of replacing a heart with an artificial one. There have also been numerous space exploration projects which are aimed to find a new home for the human race citing that the earth may become inhabitable in the near future.
In conclusion, superficially, the goal of technological advancements tends to increase people's efficiency, but the ultimate goal of the these advancements to aid the humans to innovate further and keep the humans healthy and extant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22480620155 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.978026033 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514211886305 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0771287971 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.375 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1875 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281383303701 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974061509799 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061865700114 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179355124516 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392636974591 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.