The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
The discussion on the main benefits of science advancement has long been of strong interest and debate. Some individual argues that advancement in sciences is to make chores less time consuming to perform. Hereby, increasing the amount of relaxation for mankind. On the contrast, some scientists will say, technological advancements are what make complex intrinsic theory more accessible to solve. Thereby, creating more time to be dedicated on the problem. The assumption of this essay argues that increment in technological advancement because more people have to relax in south Miami Beach or go for vacation in Hawaii. I mostly disagree with this that technological advancement are only meant for mankind to have more pleasurable time rather than deliberate on what to come, for 2 reasons.
Advancement in science has made unsolvable problems more realistic. New discovery creates an avenue for more research activities to be focus on. For example, the discovery of quantum dot in 2023 by Prof. Johnson, lay the foundation for the beginning of new branch of science on quantum dot field. Given that, this new discovery holds unknown number of values- whether good or bad, it causes for more time dedication to study what importance they hold. Even though the discovery makes possible for the developed of the novel anticancer drug, scientist is yet to ascertain the extent of toxicity, solubility or other drug ability or downside this new development may hold. Hereby, call for more time to be dedicated to this new field. In this example, the discovery of the quantum dot as the new most effective drug against cancer does not necessitate the creation for relaxation but rather create a new problem to solve. The one that require more time dedication to study the drug properties.
Likewise, technological advancement increases the productivity as well as income generated by a company. All companies want their work to progress. The main vision of a company is not to have downsides. The assumption of this prompt argues that because of the new development or technology a company made which allow exponential increase in the year revenue, necessitate them to relax and not work on how to improve on coming year revenue. For example, the discovery of land tractor makes farming easier, thereby increasing the amount of crops farmer can plant in a year and in turns increase the amount of income generated. Tin addition, this new discovery of tractor doesn’t mean the farmer will continue to have an exponential increase if the farmer does not plant more crops. In contrast, it means it will make the planting easier to do. Therefore, advancement in sciences do not create more time for relation, rather it creates more productivity time.
In conclusion, the assumption that technological advancement are primarily meant to create more time for relation is flawed for the above reasons. Rather than creating time for relaxation, it unlock new horizon for science advancement, create new problem to be solve, and make the next discovery easier to come through.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'unlocks'?
Suggestion: unlocks
...r than creating time for relaxation, it unlock new horizon for science advancement, cr...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1623246493 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86394832201 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458917835671 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3515526313 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0769230769 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1923076923 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228504377153 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811903451708 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594342293242 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164422975516 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657825278822 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'unlocks'?
Suggestion: unlocks
...r than creating time for relaxation, it unlock new horizon for science advancement, cr...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1623246493 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86394832201 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458917835671 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3515526313 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0769230769 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1923076923 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228504377153 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811903451708 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594342293242 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164422975516 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657825278822 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.