In today's society people are continually benefiting from technology. It has been incorporated in every aspect of our daily lives with the goals of turning our lives more efficient. Starting from the coffee maker that allows us to start our day with freshness and focus to the extreme example of space rockets that are sent to space to study the outer world. But with the assumption that the statement has made, a question arises. Do we use technology wisely? Do we use it for the purpose it was intended for which is to make our lives easier, more productive and efficient? Or we have taken it to a devastating level to the extent that we no longer know how to use our leisure time properly which necessarily makes the assumption accurate?
In my opinion, technology has made or life better and no one can deny this fact. But for the issue of leisure time, I believe it depends on the person personality, daily choices and circumstances. Every one will use the time they saved through the utilization of technology in their own way; according to their aims and pursuits in life. For example, a worker would invest his weekend to stay with his family and children. He prefers to spend weekends doing outdoors activities, cooking for his family or visiting his relatives. He prefers to connect personally with people. On the other hand consider another worker who would choose to spend the weekend on accomplishing extra work because this way he can get more money that will allow him to buy his dream car. As you can see, even with free time in fact it is all about priorities. So it is not correct to put the blame on technology for not spending our free times in a relaxing and convenient ways. It is the responsibility of each individual to use technology wisely so they can benefit from it.
Another example, assume a guy who has just recently finished his final exams got bored. He would definitely be lying in bed for hours watching movies or series on YouTube or he might text a friend through facebook. They would keep sending emoji and smiley faces while interacting. He probably thinks that by staying in his room for several hours with his mobile sticking in his hands and isolated from people, that he is relaxing and enjoying his time but in fact he is not. I think this will bring him more boredom and laziness. But what if this guy changed his mind and decided to meet his friend in person. This would allow for ideas and interest exchange. They would walk in the neighborhood and smell fresh air. All this will be beneficial for their mental and physical health.
In the end, I think that technology has succeeded in making our lives efficient. It indeed has saved us a huge amount of time. Providing the previous evidence, the connection between technology and our decreased free time is not accurate as long as we are using it wisely to get its benefits.
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- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t 50
- "Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the numb 58
- The best way to solve environmental problems caused by consumer-generated waste is for towns and cities to impose strict limits on the amount of trash they will accept from each household.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 81
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...car. As you can see, even with free time in fact it is all about priorities. So i...
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...re using it wisely to get its benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, for example, i think, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 33.0505617978 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64187866928 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54780241347 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514677103718 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8472370722 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7931034483 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6206896552 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86206896552 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19115344421 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509857209831 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356893611204 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108447135178 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457848363739 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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