Reason Great achievements by a nation s rulers artists or scientists will ensure a good life for the majority of that nation s people The surest indicator of a great nation must be the achievements of its rulers artists or scientists because those ac

It is a wide spread belief that the great nation must be the achievements of it's rulers, artists, or scientist. Though the greatest achievements made by a nation's rulers, artists or scientists of the nation will immensely give a great name to the nation, however, the achievements does not ensure a good life for the majority of people in nation solely. Thus, I dis agree with the statement that great achievements by a nation's rulers, artists, or scientists will ensure a good life for the majority of that nation's people.

The good life of nation's people is that when the people of nation were happy and have no savage but not by the accomplishments made by the rulers, artists, or scientists. The good nation is only when the nation is flourished by the people and is a whole of happiness and providing the lucrative options for the people of the nation. Once there was the time when Germany had many scientists, artists from its nation, however, the people are suffering from many diseases which indeed can't make it a good nation because the people of the nation are not happy.

There was a time where people assumes that if the nation has scientist, artists and get awards then that nation would be on prior. However, that is refute because if nation is flourished and the people were happy then that would be a great delight for the nation. If the nation encompass only on the accomplishments of the scientists, artist, or rulers regardless of the state of people being happy or sad and not knowing skimpy needs of the people then that would not be a great nation.

In order to become a great nation, one should think on people needs profoundly. So the accomplishments made by the scientists, artists or rulers not really matters, what actually matters is the happiness of people. Thus, I conclude that great achievements by a nation's rulers, artists, or scientists will never ensure a good life for the majority of that nation's people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for the people of the nation. Once there was the time when Germany had many scien...
^^
Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ffering from many diseases which indeed cant make it a good nation because the peopl...
^^^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'refuted'.
Suggestion: refuted
...ion would be on prior. However, that is refute because if nation is flourished and the...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, really, so, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76991150442 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66847381792 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 215.323595506 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.362831858407 0.4932671777 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6799832191 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.75 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.615552492493 0.243740707755 253% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.301865357915 0.0831039109588 363% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121748987667 0.0758088955206 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.439792344019 0.150359130593 292% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105706519146 0.0667264976115 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 100.480337079 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for the people of the nation. Once there was the time when Germany had many scien...
^^
Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ffering from many diseases which indeed cant make it a good nation because the peopl...
^^^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'refuted'.
Suggestion: refuted
...ion would be on prior. However, that is refute because if nation is flourished and the...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, really, so, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76991150442 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66847381792 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 215.323595506 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.362831858407 0.4932671777 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6799832191 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.75 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.615552492493 0.243740707755 253% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.301865357915 0.0831039109588 363% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121748987667 0.0758088955206 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.439792344019 0.150359130593 292% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105706519146 0.0667264976115 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 100.480337079 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.