Schools should do more to prepare students for non academic aspect of adulthood
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Adulthood comes with a lot of challenges ranging from getting good jobs to proper management of finances and businesses, even as personal as relationships with the other sex. Many institutions are responsible for the development of a child such as the parents, church, schools and many others. Students spend most of their formative years in school, spending most of their time there and sharing the remaining time with these other places. Based on the fact that students use most of their time in school, I’m of the believe that schools should do more to prepare students for the non academic aspect of adulthood.
As subjects such as mathematics are crucial and increase the reasoning abilities of students, they are not directly applied in adulthood. For example learning calculus and constantly iterating and differentiating does not directly apply to getting jobs through calculus. Students need to know how to apply that reasoning ability in real life. Employers these days look beyond the academic qualifications and actually want to know what you can bring to the table.
Also, engaging students in extra curricular activities such as debate, sports, school clubs and the likes have a way of developing them. I was in my school’s literary and debating club where we often debated on topics in front of the whole school, read news and also present article readings. These activities made me learn and research in other to know more about the topic I’m given. I also had to rehearse to avoid mistakes during my presentations and this increased my boldness as I had to speak in front of over 500 students. This particular club improved my public speaking skills and has really help in convincing employers during my job interviews, a bid for a job and even many others. Other students can even take interest in sports and excel well at this. These non academic skills make them more marketable while job hunting as they could have a wide range of options to choose from. If school can invest time in preparing students along these non academic line, it would be of great help to the students.
Schools also cannot do it all. Other institutions also need to take it upon themselves to prepare these students for adulthood. Parents can help in developing the emotional intelligence of these students by teaching them how to handle situations even as trivial as a fight with a sibling. All these contribute to what can help in relating with people at work places in adulthood.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ost of their time in school, I’m of the believe that schools should do more to prepare ...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...y public speaking skills and has really help in convincing employers during my job i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g. All these contribute to what can help in relating with people at work places i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ith people at work places in adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, really, so, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95704057279 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69869414453 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522673031026 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1662144965 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.85 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.95 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223907728179 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708059574232 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697831498402 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138543662172 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711648953647 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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