In the time of the internet, the spiritual demand of people is rapidly increasing. The art is no longer the privilege of nobles but the common subject accessible to everyone. However, There are controversies whether should the government involves into the art field and offer fundings to flourish this field. With a considerable amount of evidence, the conclusion could be drew that, with appropriate method, the funding from government could produce positive effects on various aspects.
First paragraph
To begin with, the investment of governments plays an essential role in building the museum, galleries and art schooles, help to spread the concept of art among the public. In China, nearly all the museum are built by the government and open to the public freely. Students also are supposed to visit at least two museums of different topic a year, which could help them to find their interest in the art field. Moreover, the art student who come from impoverished family background could be able to persue their dream with the help of the scholarship set by the government. In this sense, the funding of government contributes to the prosperity of the art.
Second paragraph
However, there are still serveral potienal integrity threatening problems. The possible corruption should be taken into consideration. The huge amount of funding to the art would lead the the potiental rent seeking problems, which means the official taking the charge would use their power to seek the kickback. Additionally, if the appraisal system of the government are different from the mainstream of the art field, some artists could change their style to get investment from government, which can be hardly called benefical in the long run. In China, the main income of laboraries in the university is the funding from government. In order to get enough budgets from the government, the director of laboraries tends to do researches which could produce the result, such as the paper in famous journals, in a short term instead of researches more meaningful but time-consuming. From the reason above, the funding of government could interfere the integrity of the art.
Third paragraph
From the advantage and disadvantage discussed above, a persuasive management of government funding in the art field is to invite the experts to form a committee to decide the usage of fundings. The experts in any field are the group of people who enjoy great reputations and wealth, which means low possibility of corruption. On the another hand, the experts knows the main stream of art fields, so the effectiveness of fundings could be guaranteed.
Ending paragraph
To sum up, the funding from government could produce various benefits to the development and prosperity of the art on the condition that there is a committee of experts supervising the usage of fundings. In this way, the government could help artists go further.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, third, at least, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 33.0505617978 30% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 473.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2156448203 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87380419339 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486257928118 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 17.0 4.99550561798 340% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8605329205 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.476190476 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334039155415 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11209004686 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717705842729 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205676267509 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279385908605 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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