Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
The statement here claims that as there is increase in violence in media that affects the society's violence. While others believe that the upringing of children play a vital role in their behaviour. Both sides of this sentence has its strenghts and weaknesses, but I fundamentally disagree with this claim about the influence and I belive that individual is sole responsible for hi overall behavior.
The statement claims that as there is increase in violence of media children are affected by this violence and can be inflluenced to behave violently. this is fallable statement as every single individual is the person of his choice. People don't get influenced this easily as they see many good workers and also the bad. This is the responsiblity of parents that their child should maintain the decorm and should do any thing that is for betterament of the society.
Secondly, I believe that media is only the way through which one gets knoewledge of outside world, and in order to thrive in the nation it is very important to know what is going on around us. It is upto us what we take from the information and how we react towards it. No one is in blame about how we behave. For example Nepolean, Hitler, Mahatma Gandhi ; we have known each of them very differntly through media but on which charecterstics we want to behave is upto us. Media is only playing its role in showing the truth of the society and it should not be held responsible for the future of children
Further, the statement claims that Some people believes that parental guidence and friends influence the behaviour how the child behave. I believe upto an extent that how a person behave is taught by their parents as if a child lives in the culture that people says "Namaste" everytime when they meet elders as a respect then child behaves like that. If friends don't create litter in the society or they are not the part of any type of vendalism in the society the peer will get influenced by it. This are true upto some level but again individual is more responsible for the behavior and should backup when there is the situation in which there is bad influence. For example if he is in bad company it is his duty to backup.
In summation, the statement mentions that the affecting factors are many but I believe that only the person himself is responsible for the way he act in the society. Neither media nor parental or peer pressure is influencing to a child except his inner selves.
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- Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others. 50
- Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tly. this is fallable statement as every single individual is the person of his c...
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...hould maintain the decorm and should do any thing that is for betterament of the society....
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...hen child behaves like that. If friends dont create litter in the society or they ar...
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...ety the peer will get influenced by it. This are true upto some level but again indi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235042735043 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.160256410256 0.157235817809 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0598290598291 0.0880659088768 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0363247863248 0.0497285424764 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0726495726496 0.0444667217837 163% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.145299145299 0.12292977631 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0235042735043 0.0406280797675 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63839928038 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0128205128205 0.030933414821 41% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.115384615385 0.0997080785238 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0128205128205 0.0249443105267 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.034188034188 0.0148568991511 230% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2483.0 2732.02544248 91% => OK
No of words: 437.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6819221968 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.313501144165 0.366273622748 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235697940503 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153318077803 0.200843997647 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0983981693364 0.132149295362 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63839928038 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 219.290929204 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464530892449 0.48968727796 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.1919821967 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.2777777778 23.380412469 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9372356905 59.4972553346 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.944444444 141.124799967 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2777777778 23.380412469 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.21349557522 211% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.8475718281 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.5 1.64882698954 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448075937242 0.391690518653 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128846658869 0.123202303941 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0577928761652 0.077325440228 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5546793568 0.547984918172 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113722446136 0.149214159877 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179731845887 0.161403998019 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100856927167 0.0892212321368 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.454228499917 0.385218514788 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0627274108956 0.0692045440612 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312641108653 0.275328986314 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511648606063 0.0653680567796 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.