Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Well both views are focusing towards influencing sources of a person's behaviour specially children. And when it comes to violence in my perspective, extent of it has reduced greatly. As with the growing rate of education and urban development happening we are getting more civilized and atleast mostly people try to avoid violent methods unless its really required. So I don't agree with the view of increasing violence withing children with that enthusiasm as I do believe media plays a significant role in curbing people or children's behaviour. And also we can't undermine the role played by the peer groups and parents in shaping of behaviour as said by the second view. Both views can overtake each other its really a subjective topic and depends person to person with which factor has more affected.
First considering role played by media we can surely say its effects are having a acceleration curve. With the increasing technological advancements in developing media sources and platform, our indulgence has been wax. And with the growing indulgence effects of behaviour changes or influences are evident. For instance roles played in movies by our loved or famous actors are highly influential. Actors having a certain perpective and thoughts towards a situation and then getting a heroic ending with writing skills makes or atleast sits somewhere unconsciously in people's mind to react in that manner. Or this is the way it has handled or its the only correct way.
In considering role played by peers and parents, there is no doubt they are first and foremost influencers of our attitude and personlity. We usually inherit traits present in one or both of our parents. Let's say if one or both of the parents are short tempered, then its mostly obvious their child will also behave as choleric among his peers or with th young ones if not infront of their parents. Children usually inherit ways to handle complex situations by seeing how they are being handled their parents. Coming to peers, our behaviour regarding different aspects of life, our hobbies, our interests are mostly influenced by the people whom we are spending time with regarding these activities.
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- Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws 80
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...cusing towards influencing sources of a persons behaviour specially children. And when ...
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Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ethods unless its really required. So I dont agree with the view of increasing viole...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ple or childrens behaviour. And also we cant undermine the role played by the peer g...
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Line 1, column 708, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...iew. Both views can overtake each other its really a subjective topic and depends p...
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Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e can surely say its effects are having a acceleration curve. With the increasing...
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Line 2, column 577, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind reacting'.
Suggestion: mind reacting
...sits somewhere unconsciously in peoples mind to react in that manner. Or this is the way it h...
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Line 2, column 644, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...r. Or this is the way it has handled or its the only correct way. In considering r...
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Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... present in one or both of our parents. Lets say if one or both of the parents are s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.699588446 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8302872009 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.941176471 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224586627954 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675363591343 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566275922221 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145296317059 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056743485932 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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