Goals are an important factor of one's development and overall growth of the society. When we achieve the goals we setup we can contribute to the improvement as a whole. In my opinion I strongly agree with the fact that most effective means of advancing the development of a society is by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual rather that goals pertaining to the whole society providing a necessary unifying direction without which individual contributions are meaningless with three reasons. To elaborate one has to go through scrupulous discussion below.
Firstly, goals can be short term and long term. For instance, Jeff Bezos the leading businessman in the retail world started from a garage working as an individual. At that point short term goals are vital and plays an important role in the enhancement of progress whereas now it has a vast empire of employees with a long term goal of making the software/business better on a day to day basis in which the contribution of every single person working in it counts. The business can be only made successful when every department in the company works with accuracy.
In addition, the collective work should be represented in the government as well. For instance, when a government is taken into account it consists of enumerate number of working bodies in it. Some of them include education, sanitization, heath departments. When health department is considered every individual from peon to the director of it contributes to the active and healthy working of the department. If a cleaning person is unavailable it leads to more diseases in the surrounding environment instead of mitigating the effects.
Lastly, the project assignment in class can also be used as an example to bolster the statement. For instance, when an assignment is given to a group of members to complete the project every individual should contribute to it so that they can gain more knowledge and enhance their skill. If a unifying direction is considered in this case the aim would be to complete the project then there might be a chance that the brilliant student would complete the whole task and the others would spend their time in leisure while the aim is completed leading to negative effect.
To conclude, many will argue that the unifying direction goal is more important than the focus on contribution resulting from an each individual. Of course the direction and a plan is important but it is also crucial to make sure that the individual goals are met. It would be easier and healthy if one concentrates on their particular goal to contribute to an overall development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Goals are an important factor of ones development and overall growth of the s...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...nt as a whole. In my opinion I strongly agree with the fact that most effective means of advancing the d...
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Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and healthy working of the department. If a cleaning person is unavailable it lea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, so, then, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, in addition, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98871331828 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96808399414 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483069977427 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.3114504971 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.315789474 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3157894737 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293498103631 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787128167167 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120409342897 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166660540171 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151830636607 0.0667264976115 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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