Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
There is an perenial debate about whether technology is a boon or a bane. Humans have witnessed some great implementations of technology and some blunders as well. The promt suggests that some people believe that the increasing use technology has reduced space for human interaction. And the others believe that technology is the new way of connecting and communicating. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the latter for 3 main reasons.
Firstly, communication is the fulcrum of human civilization. Different eras of human history has seen a different modes of communication. For instance, many years back pigeons were used to send and receive messages, then came the time of writing letters to each other etc. Each mode of communication better than before. Just like moving from pigeons to letters, on invention of gadgets like phone, laptop etc, humans have taken on a new mode of commucation through these gadgets. Keeping in touch with the world now is just a tap away. With devices connected to the a very convoluted mesh network, within seconds the receipient can be reached. Such is the power of ever-growing technology.
Secondly, In this period of influenzers, there is continuous addition of new social media platforms to our stock. Such platforms make connecting and communicating jecound. Social media helps us to stay connected by requiring minimal effort. For example, on apps like instagram people continously share and just react to reels. Keeping the two involved interested and connected in this loop. Other apps like snapchats where people talk via images. Here, we see not only is connecting made easy but also interesting ways have come up for communicating.
Thirdly, while letters and pigeons had communication done strictly via writing, evolution of technology now helps in communicating through video calls. Video calls enables talking as well as seeing the other person thus augmenting reality to some extent. To illustrate this, consider a student studying abroad. Earlier for the families to make a contact with the child was very arduous. But now it all has become very easy. The family can video call and see him in realtime. Thus making it convienient.
Although, some might argue that technology makes the user addicted and lose the touch of reality, technology is the one actually augmenting reality and hence the addiction. Therefore, the technology has reached such a height where connecting and communicating is far more simpler and engaging.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
There is an perenial debate about whether technolog...
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Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'mode'?
Suggestion: mode
...s of human history has seen a different modes of communication. For instance, many ye...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 563, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...t a tap away. With devices connected to the a very convoluted mesh network, within se...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...react to reels. Keeping the two involved interested and connected in this loop. O...
^^
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'simpler' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: simpler
...ere connecting and communicating is far more simpler and engaging.
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2225 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9121201469 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9860982336 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0344827586 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7931034483 23.4991977007 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376405245245 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794401038106 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803822395915 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188989967707 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111010812271 0.0667264976115 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
There is an perenial debate about whether technolog...
^^
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'mode'?
Suggestion: mode
...s of human history has seen a different modes of communication. For instance, many ye...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 563, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...t a tap away. With devices connected to the a very convoluted mesh network, within se...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...react to reels. Keeping the two involved interested and connected in this loop. O...
^^
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'simpler' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: simpler
...ere connecting and communicating is far more simpler and engaging.
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2225 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9121201469 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9860982336 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0344827586 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7931034483 23.4991977007 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376405245245 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794401038106 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803822395915 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188989967707 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111010812271 0.0667264976115 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.