Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Others believe that universities should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
It has been a long-term heated discussion that whether the curriculum should diversified or job-oriented. Both sides have their grounds and I believe that universities should not persuade or force students to take any courses that are outside their majors.
Undoubtedly, taking a variety of courses expands one’s knowledge. My mom forced me to play piano every day when I was young, though I was only interested in science. I was reluctantly at that time but now I am starting to appreciate it, because I realized that there are a surprising degree of resemblance between science and art. It turned out that playing piano could inspire to me come up with an ingenious solution when I was beleaguered by an engineering problem. However, I do not think it will be equally conducive for college students to be involved in many extra-curriculum courses.
First of all, most students already have a heavy workload just for the major courses. I have been both a student and a teaching assistant myself. It is frequent to see students cannot even spare twenty minutes for lunch during the day, especially when exams are approaching. As a result, extra-curriculum courses will serve as a distraction under such circumstances. I tried taking an English literature class when I was a freshman, because I am a foreign student and have a penchant for literature. But that plan did not work out because I already had enough on my plate as an engineering student, especially I went to a university that is known to be have highly competitively engineering programs. Therefore, courses that are not required for that major may seriously distract students.
Furthermore, if the extra-curriculum courses are intended for broadening students' knowledge, there are also many other channels to increase knowledge that is outside the major field of study but takes less time. The advent of Internet renovates how one learns, by providing an astronomical amount of resources for everyone who has access to it. Online educational institutes and open courses, such as Coursera and Yale Open Course, are gaining increasing popularity, which has brought tremendous convenience to those who are eager to learn. Students no longer need to rush to a classroom regularly to be engrossed in their favorite subjects. One simple click on the video suffices to embark on the journey of study. The prevalence of online education has minimized the necessity of going to a real classroom to study interesting subjects. Thus, it is unnecessary to force students to take extra-curriculum courses at the universities.
In conclusion, I believe that it is more sensible to not force students, who need more time to focus on their major coursework, to take courses that are not relevant for future job hunting. If students would like to cultivate interests on a subject, they can simply enlighten themselves through online education, which provides more comprehensive yet convenient studying environments.
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Essay evaluation report
whether the curriculum should diversified or job-oriented
whether the curriculum should be diversified or job-oriented
It is frequent to see students cannot even spare twenty minutes
It is frequent to see students who cannot even spare twenty minutes
playing piano could inspire to me come up with an ingenious solution
playing piano could inspire me coming up with an ingenious solution
it is more sensible to not force students, who need more time
it is more sensible not to force students who need more time
that is known to be have highly competitively engineering programs.
that is known to have highly competitively engineering programs.
flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2 //you still have grammatical issues
2. The essay is not exactly right on the topic, look:
...will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields.
while we didn't find them in the arguments
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2433 1500
No. of Different Words: 262 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.058 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.049 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.336 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thanks a lot for the feedback
Thanks a lot for the feedback!
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, of course, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19958419958 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14227804839 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553014553015 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6311495315 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.739130435 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9130434783 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312952695054 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843145224428 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850360646189 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175015013757 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719883554289 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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