Some people think that having set retirement age(e.g. 65 Years) for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers desire to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
People chose their occupation on their own will. Many work hard and clear competitive exams to achieve what they dreamt of. Having said that an individual may find it satisfying to work his chosen occupation. Retiring early and feeling entitled to receive a pension does not seem feasible and logical. I mostly disagree with the claim that many workers desire to retire and receive a pension before the superannuation limit set. This is mostly due to the following reasons discussed below.
Many occupations like sports where physical prowess is much more important than experience can be justified to request for an early retirement. Physical fitness is known to deteriorate with growing age. Many sportsmen therefore retire by the age of thirty five-forty for the very same reason. This does not mean they have not performed their best duties. Pension to such sportsmen that have given their blood and sweat on the field is rightfully deserving.
However, setting a retirement age does not seem to be unfair considering the fact that many factors are being considered. For example, in the case of Defence forces, if the government allows their military personnels to retire early, there will be a void in the leadership roles. It is a known fact that a military general needs to have an ample of experience to take decisions which could make or break the security of the country. The young officers though having the flair and flamboyance may lack the knowledge compared to an officer having much more experience.
Moreover, the courts in India require a erudite and an experienced person arbitrating over the legal concerns and matters related to court and justice. For the very same reason, the high courts and the supreme court of India have stipulated a certain age of practicing law before being able to be eligible as a Judge.
If people think working up to a certain age and then retiring and getting pension, could cause a big loss to the revenue of the government. Also, if people think they are not able to work due to some or the other reason there is always the option of Voluntary Retirement Service available for them. They could opt and get the retirement benefits commensurate to the service they provided.
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- Some people think that having set retirement age e g 65 Years for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair They believe that certain workers desire to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age 58
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoni 68
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...iven their blood and sweat on the field is rightfully deserving. However, setting a retirement age ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...is a known fact that a military general needs to have an ample of experience to take ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... Moreover, the courts in India require a erudite and an experienced person arbit...
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Line 9, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mensurate to the service they provided.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95478723404 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62239841764 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7670160325 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.15 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35941479059 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963975196069 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619528082464 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184867115662 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632423794712 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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