Role models are personnels that people, either young or old, look up to in an attempt to follow in their footsteps. Most of the times, people select role models for different reasons ranging from their perceived personalities to their successfulness in their careers. Sports stars and movie stars are role models to a lot of young adults and as such, are believed to be modest and responsible so that they can be a positive influence on the society at large. However, this does not explicitly mean that they are mandated to portray themselves as good citizens solely because they are being paid.
Firstly, sports and movie stars worked really hard to be where they are today and it would ludicrous to mandaye that they should be good role models based on the fact that they are being paid to do their jobs. In contrast, they should be encouraged to be in order to have a good, functional society given the number of young adults and children that look up to them. In a recent interview with Ronaldo, a sport star, pointed out that he does not do drugs nor drink alcohol because his dad was an alcoholic. This behavior could influence young adults to abstain from drug abuse and alcohol abuse. Hence, sports starts should be encouraged to be good citizens based on their personal convictions and not because they are being paid.
Furthermore, sports and movie celebrities are the most exposed on the media and they could be face of a societal campaign, so it would be very disappointing when they exhibit a behaviour that contradict that campaign as it would affect the cause they are fighting for. For instance, Jussie Smollette, an American movie star who is always seen fighting for LGBTQ+ rights and racial equality wasinvestigated and discovered that he lied about an incident. This not only affect his career, but it also affected the campaign he was fronting and the innocent people involved. Therefore, movie star does not only represent themselves but are revered by people. So, acting otherwise will be detrimental to a positive cause that could propiet a society.
Some would point out that one of the reasons they are paid so much is to be good citizens,however, I would like to point out that are earned the pay. so they should not be required to perform another obigation.
It should also, be noted that this does not mean that they movie stars and sports stars should not have a life of their own, but they should be cautious of their behavour as they are being looked up to by different class of people in the society who seek to emulate their behaviour.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the reasons they are paid so much is to be good citizens,however, I would like ...
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Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , however
...are paid so much is to be good citizens,however, I would like to point out that are ea...
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Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... much is to be good citizens,however, I would like to point out that are earned ...
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Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...e to point out that are earned the pay. so they should not be required to perform ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73273942094 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54907731343 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45434298441 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6770431654 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4117647059 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317601220659 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110734389964 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668261645 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194961151229 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742360836294 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the reasons they are paid so much is to be good citizens,however, I would like ...
^^
Line 4, column 91, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , however
...are paid so much is to be good citizens,however, I would like to point out that are ea...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... much is to be good citizens,however, I would like to point out that are earned ...
^^
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...e to point out that are earned the pay. so they should not be required to perform ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73273942094 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54907731343 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45434298441 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6770431654 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4117647059 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317601220659 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110734389964 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668261645 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194961151229 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742360836294 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.