The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that the general welfare of people is the only one surest indicator representing great nation. However, scientists, leaders, and artists’ achievements can also be an indicator reflecting general welfare. Then, scientists, artists, and leaders’ achievements can also represent the great nation; So, I strongly disagree with the speaker.
To begin with, the surest indicator is also represented by the achievement of its scientists, since scientists’ achievements enhance the quality of life, which is one of the general welfare. Scientists invent many stuffs that make people’s life convenient; Such a convenient invention is another way bringing general welfare to people. For example, Prof. Chenming Hu, the Berkeley’s professor, invents the special structure of transistor: FinFET. His invention make cellphones, computers, and other personal electronic devices progressing without stopping. With the progressing electronic devices, people’s quality of life is increasing. In a word, the achievements of scientists is also an indicator of general welfare.
In addition to scientists, politicians’ achievements are also an indicator of general welfare, because people benefit from effective policies. Using effective policies, efficient leaders make their country prosperous. If the problems emerge, such as financial crisis, leaders must find out the main problems to solve the emergency problems. With such a greatness leader and his or her policies, the country’s people can get a happy life. For instance, Obama is a greatness leader. In his presidency, he addressed the global financial crisis and included a major stimulus package, including legislation to reform health care and major financial regulation reform bill. Through his policies, people get a relative stable life. In sum, rulers’ achievements are one of the indicator representing the general welfare.
On the other hand, artists’ achievements exercise an influence on people’s general welfare. Sometimes, artists’ works can reflect the defect of the country; With their works, governments can realize what is lacking in the country. Willian Shakespeare can be an illustration; His works was a critical reading data, reflecting the real society in English. Understanding people’s requirements through his works, governments facilitated management of country in his time. In a brief, artists’ achievements can be an indicator of general welfare, since it would influence people’s life.
To sum up, the achievements of leaders, artists, and scientists can be an surest indicator representing people’s general welfare. Scientists’ inventions, leaders’ effective policies, and artists’ works have an positive effect on general welfare of people; Therefore, I totally disagree with what the speaker says.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96568627451 5.05705443957 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20748595739 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7080136185 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.36 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.32 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280771803031 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911770804893 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871408545508 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183341018365 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636521856329 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.05 12.1639044944 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.