The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people
A nation is a group of people who are governed by a common leader. So, the welfare of all the people in the nation should be a good yardstick to measure the greatness of the nation. The statement here asserts that the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. I strongly disagree with this statement for the reasons discussed below.
Firstly, having rich and prosperous artists, rulers, or scientists doesn't essentially mean that all the people in the nation are successful. These rulers may have risen to new heights of prosperity because of rampant corruption in the nation. This rampant corruption will have a huge effect on the lives of common people in the nation. For instance, let us say that the government started a new scheme in the health sector to lift up the health of all the people in the nation. If the leaders in the health sector are corrupted and collude with hospitals to make themselves rich then the benefits of this scheme started by the government would never reach the end-users which will result in the failure of a health scheme. Thus, this example illustrates that even though the rulers got rich it may not have a positive effect on the lives of the common people. Also, these rulers being rich doesn't essentially mean that all the people in the nation are rich.
Secondly, any nation having great scientists and inventions also doesn't essentially mean that the entire nation is great. Only when the inventions from these scientists are put into practice and made useful to people then these inventions would be of use. If the government couldn't make these inventions useful to people because of lack of funds then these inventions would be of no use to general people. Also, these scientists may fly away to a rich nation where they can make their inventions can be made useful to general welfare people. For instance, there is an Alpha country that has a lot of great scientists. These scientists have invented a new method of producing electricity in a cost-effective way. Even though the method is cost-efficient the government doesn't have enough funds to put this into use and provide electricity to all the people in the nation which can uplift the general welfare of all the people in the nation. These scientists would definitely get frustrated as their inventions are of no use in that nation. Thus, the above example clearly illustrates that having great scientists and inventions doesn't essentially make a nation great until and unless these inventions are put into use to uplift the general welfare of people.
Some may argue there are some nations in which both people and scientists, artists, rulers are rich. Is this correlation true in each and every country? It may be true for some rich nations like the United States but may not be true for all the nations in the world. Thus it is clear from the above reasons that having great achievements from rulers, artists don't essentially contribute to the general welfare of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2570.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 529.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85822306238 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61063186686 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.351606805293 0.4932671777 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.494931699 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.083333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0416666667 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329976687929 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106315518707 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104946358871 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228658553111 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127268209747 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.