technology is aimed at making our lives simple but ends up making it complicated
The statement states that technology is aimed at making our lives simple but ends up making it complicated. I disagree with the statement.
There has been a rampant growth in the technology sector of almost all the developing countries and all of the developed countries in the last decade. A simple example to illustrate this fact is smartphone which brought about a revolution in the communication sector. Smartphones have evolved from mobile phones which had in turn evolved from cordless telephones. This evolution hardly took 10 years. Smartphones play a major role in our lives and not only as a device for oral communication. If a person has to go on a vacation and doesn't have the luxury to carry a lot devices, smartphones are the answer. Smartphones provides us a way to communicate via text messages or video calling. We can capture good quality pictures with it, use the maps feature to track down a place we want to visit or GPS feature to ensure we are not lost. We can use the smartphone as a translator and communicate in a foreign language. These features seem daunting at first to a new user leading to a conclusion that smartphone is complicating his/her life but if a person passes the initial hurdle of just operating the phone with an open mind, he/she can see how helpful it is.
This example can be extended to all kinds of technologies. A surgeon may feel uncomfortable using an robotic arm for performing a surgery but once he/she is able to operate it well, many complicated operations can be performed efficiently. Switching from a book to e-ink reader might take some time to get used to, but in turn provide a way to read while travelling , save up space and also save the environment. Simple technologies like washing machine saves tremendous efforts and time.
Technology can seem to make life complicated but if a person puts in a little effort with an open mind, that same technology can make his/her life easier in many ways.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The statement states that technology is ...
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...ted. I disagree with the statement. There has been a rampant growth in the t...
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...If a person has to go on a vacation and doesnt have the luxury to carry a lot devices,...
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...d, he/she can see how helpful it is. This example can be extended to all kind...
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... A surgeon may feel uncomfortable using an robotic arm for performing a surgery bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, well, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77419354839 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87465418347 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589442815249 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5605279582 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7647058824 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88235294118 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258797666666 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793318524093 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178132739347 0.0758088955206 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2380350341 0.150359130593 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.222411489454 0.0667264976115 333% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.