Those who see their ideas through, regardless of doubts or criticism others may express, are the ones who tend to leave a lasting legacy.
Our desires and ambitions and how those are decisively utilized can make the world a better place. Thorughout history there have been a number of individuals who have pushed through their ideas amid extensive criticism and hardships, which ultimately left a lasting legacy for all of us to admire.
One example of a legend who inarguably made an impact to our society is Steve Jobs. He effectively pioneered the expansive effort to make personal computers accessible in layman terms in the 90s. Intense criticism and other issues led him to become an pariah within Apple, and he left only to come back as the prodigal son in the early 2000s. As the new leader of the company, he defined the availability of personal music with the iPod, he defined what a smartphone should be with the iPhone, and prior to his death, envisioned what would be come the iPad. Such a legacy could only have been accomplished by him. Today, Apple struggles to innovate as they did in the past, and some ponder if they will lead the way into the future as they in the last 20 years.
Another grandiose leader was LBJ. The former President with his "Great Society" agenda was able to have a lasting impact in the country. Three long lasting pieces of legislation, the Civil Rights Act, Medicaid and Medicare were signed into law during his administration. Although he was harshly criticized for his handling of the Vietnam War, his vision for the country was not derailed. His personal experience as a former Senate majority leader made him unique to see his plan through. Even though his reputation was tainted by the national issues of the time, today he is one of the many great examples of leaders who envisioned a plan and left a unique legacy in the country.
Creating a lasting legacy is not a feat that can be accomplished by everyone. It can only be done by people with vision and the desire to plow through criticisms and their own personal doubts. Steve Jobs and LBJ are two legends who have seismically changed our society. One through technology and the other through government, have become aspirations to all of us of the good we can do for our people if we follow a sedulous plan which can turn is into legends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71722365039 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60498720285 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532133676093 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7671119526 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.944444444 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 5.21951772744 6% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173000379741 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510222193023 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463714574627 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115986004281 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452630757038 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.