The definition of success could be various. All of us, who is optimistic toward daily life, have a dream. Either these kinds of dream would be a small goal for ourselves, or, for someone, could be a big dream for the whole country. Given such different extents to success, it is hard to say whether achieve a goal set by ourselves could be a success. Personally, I'm partially agree with the point given by the topic.
As we all know, the goal would just be regarded as a small dream in our life. Sometimes, we may just expect that we can have a good emotion in the next day, or have a taste of our favorite breakfast in order to unlock a whole day's energy. When we in our school time, we hope that we can fathom all of the knowledges which were imparted by our teacher. Similarly,as we step into a company, working in a particular position, we may always hope for a promotion or an substantial increasing in our salary. All of these dreams can be seen as a goal for ourselves. It is just for interests of us and our families, but not for others.
Nonetheless, Some significant dreams that would change the country or world could be considered as big dreams.Not only can these kinds of dreams be considered as a goal for oneself, but also as a goal for all of people in the society. For example, when I was a high school student, I have learnt a passage in my Chinese class. That is I Have A Dream by Martin. He had a dream to emancipate all of the black people from the poor social status in that time of social setting. He set a goal for himself, and also for all of the citizens. The same thing could be seen on the scientist. For most of the scientist, their job is to solve more difficulties in a particulat science field. They would spend a year or many years to discover a new idea or invent a new technology. Surly, they love science. They love to do deep scientific researches. But also, they love their country in anothe intangible way.They are wokring hard to find out more new discoveries in order to contribute for their country, or even, for the whole world. In my view, their goals are great, more meaningful and sometimes moving. They put the whole world into their heart.
In my opinion, everyone has a true success in everyday. All of us would have a goal in our mind, no matter big or small.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nonetheless, similarly, so, for example, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34180138568 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54176743379 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482678983834 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4473750507 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3076923077 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6538461538 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188777539019 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569414054898 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548960750441 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118442300269 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446501941192 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 14.1392134831 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 12.1639044944 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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