Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In these days a person is nothing without an appealing image. In fact, they are never late to work on this and hide everything that is in reality. The prompt states that our society worries more about an appealing image than the reality or truth behind it. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this for two reasons.
First, living a doubled reality and offering a different image makes one’s life harder and gives a chance for speculation. Thus, hiding reality makes things hard to progress and causes distress. For example, celebrities that are very worried to have a good image but in fact they have to deal with different problems or diseases that everyone does. They are afraid of speculations, which might make them feel worse or take them to fatalities. They try to keep an appealing image, which many times they fail to. Our society prefers to see the good side and make them suffer in order to keep this image. Time has proven that the truth cannot hide forever.
Further, even though we assume that our society should work on keeping the nice image, this should be based on good deeds and a healthy reality. For example, there are many famous people that built their image by showing how they deal and how they do in real life. There is research that states that sharing information with other people makes them sympathetic and helps them find themselves in famous peoples’ stories. In other words, normal people face many problems, due to luck, health, etc, and find out they are not alone. Thus, the world is small and this is our big home. We need to feel we belong.
Of course some argue that in our society everything should look beautiful, and that is why we should feel great first with ourselves and then for the others. If we do so we will have a better life and less worries. People who ignore their inner voices, will have to suffer but those who don’t will survive the wild society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd this is our big home. We need to feel we belong. Of course some argue that in...
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Line 4, column 201, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun worries is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...we do so we will have a better life and less worries. People who ignore their inner ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, then, thus, for example, in fact, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62463343109 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19687830429 2.79657885939 79% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542521994135 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2498039211 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.85 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139851550768 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04441524928 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616681862349 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972923426463 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770861966901 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.1392134831 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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