The issue of how a society should prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is a contentious one. There are several schools of thought and approaches concerning this. Each of the sides of the argument has its own strength and weaknesses. Nevertheless, instilling a sense of cooperation is the best possible way to achieve this goal. Therefore, I mostly agree with the opinion that young people should be instilled a sense of cooperation, not competition.
First of all, cooperation is the basis of human civilization. It is one of the traits of human race which differs humans from other animals who at large do not show any consistent and large scale precedence of cooperation. If cooperation did not exist, then the human civilization might have not reached the state it is in nowadays. Young people are the future citizens of the country, They will be entrusted with the task of governance, business and other sectors integral to a country's sustenance and development. If they are not urged to be cooperative then it may hamper the very basis of human civilization . By cooperation young generation are trained better for the responsibilities awaiting them in the later life. For example, if a generation of high school students are trained in an environment which extremely competitive and not cooperative then they may be able to succeed in tasks which are done individually. However, tasks which require teamwork and collaboration they would fall headlong. As they had been taught to think only competitively they would not be able to inculcate a sense of cooperation deep down to their heart.
It is true that competition is beneficial in a wide variety of cases. If competition does not exist then their would not be any great impetus of improvement. Without it flaws of government or business organisations would be gone unnoticed. Competition points out flaws and help us choose the best. But it cannot protect the root of all collective endeavors. Without cooperation, competition takes an ugly turn, yielding sinister results in the long run. For instance, there are 2 political parties in a country namely party A and party B. Party A is the ruling party and its government has to take some critical decision related to the country's defense or security. In this scenario, if party B does not cooperate with the ruling party in this critical matter and tries to sabotage the government plan, then it would not bear any positive results for the country as a whole. Thus, common sense and personal experiences tell us that why cooperation is such an significant factor.
In conclusion, although competition is useful in some cases its momentousness is very limited. Fields where team collaboration is the most important trait, competition certainly becomes a block to the goal whereas cooperation paves the way to achieve it. Therefore, cooperation should always get the first priority.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 37.0 12.9106741573 287% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10144927536 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03845197825 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517598343685 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4588237552 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2592592593 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48148148148 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261306754169 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646124471797 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058159721726 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161035065092 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684382232819 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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