The author states that the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean because the baskets, which recently found in the immediate vicinity of the Palean village and so-called Palean baskets were discovered in Lithos village. Although the argument seems convincing at first, the lack of evidence leads me to question the validity.
First, the author needs to provide solid evidence to prove that the basket, which was discovered in Lithos, was originated in Palean village. She hastily concludes that the distinct pattern of basket utilized only in the prehistoric village of Palean, so the basket was made by people from Palean. However, archaeologists discovered only one basket in Lithos, which means that it could be a coincidence or the pattern of the basket might be popular for every village. This indicates that it is not enough information to argue that the basket came from Palean village. In addition, the author should not conclude from the fact that only one basket was discovered recently. The conclusion should be made in the long run if other baskets or evidence are found in the future. If other baskets are not discovered in a few years, her argument would be weakened. Hence, the author should not rashly deduce that the basket was originated from the Palean.
Second, more concrete pieces of evidence are needed on the boat which was able to cross between Lithos and Palean village. The author argues that Palean people must have crossed the Brim River by boat because the river is so deep and broad, but the boat has not been found yet. It is quite plausible that the Palean people cross the river by walk because in the past the river was not deep and broad, so they did not need to take the boat to go to other villages. Also, without ruling out all other possible explanations for other boats have not been discovered yet is still unwarranted. No discovery does not mean that Palean people did not have any boat at all. It is possible that the Palean’s boat were broken because of the adverse typhoon in the past. Therefore, the author should not hastily deduce that Palean people had to take the boat to go to the Lithos village.
Lastly, the author needs to add concrete evidence to the argument that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean because recently the basket was discovered in Lithos were across the Brim River from Palea. In all likelihood, Only Palean people used the distinctive pattern and they gave Lithos village the basket as the gift. This indicates that the baskets were uniquely Palean. In addition, it is possible that Lithos’ people had the boats which were able to cross the river and they brought lots of baskets to their village. In this case, without any more detailed information, we could not trust the author’s argument that the baskets of Palean were not uniquely Palean and also used by Lithos people.
In conclusion, the author argues that the so-called Palean baskets were only possessed by Palean people is invalid. To bolster the argument, she needs to reconsider the possibility of the boat the archaeologist has not been found.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, second, so, still, therefore, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89353612167 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40806016889 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.361216730038 0.4932671777 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9379611933 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9166666667 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285458889595 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102036307777 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730836469649 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18863307101 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285028405154 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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