Long-term, realistic goals are crucial factors for determining the success of people. However, I do not think that these goals are more important than immediate fame and recognition. Therefore, young people should be encouraged to pursue both long-term, realistic goals and immediate fame. I will explain the reasons for my argument in this essay.
First, immediate fame and recognition can encourage people to continue their tasks. For example, if a researcher wants to create a new efficient method to produce electricity from biomass, it may take five to ten years to finish the project. Without any immediate recognition, the researcher may think that his research is not much important and, after two or three years, he may not pay much attention to this research and try to change his research topic. In contrast, if the researcher try to seek immediate recognition by publishing his idea to the public. He can suddenly get a lot of praise and receive many awards from the public for his innovative idea. This recognition will stimulate him to spend all of his effort to the project in order to show the results to the society that is waiting for it.
Second, immediate fame can prove that the one’s goal is in the right direction. If someone does not try to seek immediate fame and wait until his final goal is met, he may finally find that his goal is not valuable for the society at all. For instance, a teacher in my school tried to make a computer program that could teach mathematics to his children and he tried to seek immediate fame by presenting his idea to students and other teachers. He found that his idea did not get much attention from them because the students preferred to study with humans rather than a computer program. Accordingly, the teacher changed his goal and spent his time for other project instead. He might waste a lot of time in this project without any return if he does not try to find the immediate fame to prove that his goal was interesting or not.
Someone may argue that long-term and realistic goals are the only things that can benefit the society, so we should not seek immediate fame and recognition. This is not true because the immediate fame and recognition can benefit the society by introducing many role models and many ideas to people in the society. Although, these ideas are not finished or unrealistic, they can encourage may people to try new things for the better societies.
All in all, I believe that young people should be encouraged to pursue both long-term goal and immediate fame because both of them can finally lead people to their success.
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Essay evaluation report
The essay has good arguments.
flaws:
No. of Words: 452 while No. of Different Words: 187
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2115 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.679 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.5 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.273 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.212 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n finally lead people to their success.
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in contrast']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228282828283 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.153535353535 0.157235817809 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0868686868687 0.0880659088768 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0383838383838 0.0497285424764 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0686868686869 0.0444667217837 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.107070707071 0.12292977631 87% => OK
Participles: 0.020202020202 0.0406280797675 50% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.59698234339 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0525252525253 0.030933414821 170% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0909090909091 0.0997080785238 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.040404040404 0.0249443105267 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00606060606061 0.0148568991511 41% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2633.0 2732.02544248 96% => OK
No of words: 452.0 452.878318584 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82522123894 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323008849558 0.366273622748 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252212389381 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176991150442 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128318584071 0.132149295362 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59698234339 2.79330140395 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 219.290929204 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433628318584 0.48968727796 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.7241956478 55.4138127331 86% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.6 23.380412469 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.744473327 59.4972553346 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.65 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.380412469 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.65 0.674092028746 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.8212389381 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.36434108527 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412674783566 0.391690518653 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138452726064 0.123202303941 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0756873984274 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.572122859423 0.547984918172 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160486541558 0.149214159877 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184258076946 0.161403998019 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772155817855 0.0892212321368 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.349480271059 0.385218514788 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.138663810568 0.0692045440612 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305727650774 0.275328986314 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627524790369 0.0653680567796 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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