Birth day party

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Birth day party

party is very special in life. Parties always bring happiness, I am party aholic person so, I adore party. I would like to establish my views about my birth day party.
Day before birth day party, I prepare many things. Firstly, I beautify my dwelling with colourful lights, flowers and many more. Moreover, my all family members make spik and span to our dwelling.

On the day of celebration, I go to market with family to buy same things such as cake, sweats, outfits, footwears, and many more. Later on we came back to dwelling and go to sikh temple with family members to prey to God for feel peace of mind as well as bright future.

In addition we all watch a bomd blasting block buster. I also invite my friends on my birth day party. In evening, My family members and friends get together and really relish my birth party, when I cut the cake, suddenlly those are presant there, claping and wish me for bright future. Moreover, we taste multi-cuisines dish and snacks as well as beverages. What is more, we dance on D.J. floor, I also share my foot- step on D.J. floor.

Eventually, my family members and friends give me precious gift. My all brith day party memorable for me. So in this way I celebrate my birth day party.

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Sentence: Parties always bring happiness, I am party aholic person so, I adore party.
Description: A verb 'to be', present tense, 1st person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: I am a party aholic person

Sentence: Parties always bring happiness, I am party aholic person so, I adore party.
Error: aholic Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Moreover, my all family members make spik and span to our dwelling.
Error: spik Suggestion: ?

Sentence: In evening, My family members and friends get together and really relish my birth party, when I cut the cake, suddenlly those are presant there, claping and wish me for bright future.
Error: suddenlly Suggestion: suddenly
Error: claping Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: presant Suggestion: present

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Avg. Sentence Length: 14.062 21.0 More compound or complex sentences wanted.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

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No. of Sentences: 16 15
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Sentence Length SD: 7.369 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.206 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5