The graph below discusses lives of men, women with no children and women with children in one region of canada.
The below graph illustrates how many people are living with men, women with no children and women with children in one region of canada.
Firstly, In graph X-axis shows different Ages of people and Y-axis shows how many people are living. Coming to men's, In age group 20 the graph has started with 20,000 men's. It has suddenly increased. In age group 22 the graph has reached at 27,000. And it has maintained same level up to 25 age group. Again it has raised and reached at 34,000 at age group 30. After that it has slitely extended and reached at 39,000 in that situation the age group is 32. The remaining age groups 34-55 have constant in that figure only.
Secondly, In women with children age groups in this the graph has started with 15,000 figure and it has suddenly grown up reached at 25,000 at the age group 22. After, it is gradually growing and stoped at 29,000 at the age group 32. Later the graph has mainted same figure up to 34-45 age groups. Afterwards it has dramatically declined at 20,000 at the age group 50. The same figure has continued in 55 age group also.
Thirdly, In women with children age groups in this the graph has started with 5000 and constantly expanded up to 38 age group . But after it has rapidly raised and reached to 27,000 at the age group 40 the same figure has maintained up to 42 age. After it has greatly decreased and reached at 10,000 at the age group 45 the figure has maintained up to 55 age group.
To sum up, in this total graph the men life is constant at surtain age but women with no children and women with children lifes are totally opposite to the men life style.
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Sentence: Thirdly, In women
Sentence: Thirdly, In women with children age groups in this the graph has started with 5000 and constantly expanded up to 38 age group .
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Sentence: Thirdly, In women with children age groups in this the graph has started with 5000 and constantly expanded up to 38 age group .
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Sentence: To sum up, in this total graph the men life is constant at surtain age but women with no children and women with children lifes are totally opposite to the men life style.
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Sentence: After that it has slitely extanted and reached at 39,000 in that situation the age group is 32.
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Sentence: The ramaining age groups 34-55 have constant in that figure only.
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Sentence: After, it is gradually growing and stoped at 29,000 at the age group 32.
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Sentence: Later the graph has mainted same figure up to 34-45 age groups.
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Sentence: To sum up, in this total graph the men life is constant at surtain age but women with no children and women with children lifes are totally opposite to the men life style.
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Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 17 10
No. of Words: 302 200
No. of Characters: 1293 1000
No. of Different Words: 113 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.281 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.143 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.034 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.353 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.495 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.649 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.228 0.07
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