If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would your change ? use reason and specific example support your answer
Obviously, peoples are already have hometown begin from they are born in the world. Hometown is a place and the surroundings where we are grow. I have hometown, in there I am growing with my parent and my hometown name is Pontianak West Borneo. In Pontianak include is city that begin development city. In the following paragraphs I will try to support my answer with some reason and examples.
First of all, I would say at my city is city small that maybe development still very less. My hometown is numerous building and factory such factory oil palm, factory coconut, factory rubber and building others. Many employee work in there, they work from evening until evening and they get salary one in one month. Beside building and factory, in there shops are small. I see the all are good. It is because as type improve income but influence from it is numerous rubbish and building that not orderly.
Therefore if I can change my hometown is I will orderly shops, factory and building that not neat become all building neat. I will cooperation with government to realize the plan. Give to help to administration to clean my howetown. Beside clean building and the rest is walk, walk that still break if rain walk will flood.
Secondly the road that still break and flood if rain comes is with construction condition road and make social like their building that already is made with such as throw trash at place and give plants at side road. Beside clean official that clean road, social must to care the road too.
To sum up: howetown is place born that must we are keep care so that we hometown will wonderfull and the people can enjoy with our city.
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Sentence: Obviously, peoples are already have hometown begin from they are born in the world.
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Sentence: In Pontianak include is city that begin development city.
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Sentence: First of all, I would say at my city is city small that maybe development still very less.
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Sentence: I see the all are good.
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Sentence: It is because as type improve income but influence from it is numerous rubbish and building that not orderly.
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Sentence: Therefore if I can change my hometown is I will orderly shops, factory and building that not neat become all building neat.
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Sentence: I will cooperation with government to realize the plan.
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Sentence: Beside clean official that clean road, social must to care the road too.
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Sentence: To sum up: howetown is place born that must we are keep care so that we hometown will wonderfull and the people can enjoy with our city.
Error: howetown Suggestion: how town
Error: wonderfull Suggestion: wonderful
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