Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poor nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas
Nowadays, with all development in the world, many nations are growth very rapidly while some others are not. There are several important factor that must get more attention from richer nations in order to support the development in poor nations; which are improvement in health, education and trade.
To begin with, the rich nations which contain of many big countries are the countries that has very stable in all factors. Rich nations has a power to help many poor nations which commonly have problem in health, education, and trade. Firstly, health; this factor is very important because when people becomes beliefs their medication in domestic are very great they would spend all the money in the domestic hospital. As can be seen recently in majority of big country for examples; indonesia. Many rich people are believes to controlling their health and spend a lot of money in singapore and malaysia. Secondly, education; this factor is very important to support all factors in the future, this factor also will determining how the civilization will evolve in the future. The help on scholarship by sending smart student to study in big nations are very essential part. Thirdly, trade; this factor become very important to support industries in the development nations, the help in investment and working relationship will support economic development in all those development nations.
Furthermore, if the big nations wanted to donate much money in such areas, should the government review again what the benefit it self for the donated country- big nations-. There are several accident happen according to the history, one the poor nations really developed, they even make a strict regulation in all of segment. To prevent all those things in the future, should be the donation contract mention all those relationship that can be added in the future.
In conclusion, helping the poor nations totally are big investment for big nations, donate in such 3 potential factor are very essential. Good relationship in the future would lead to greatest coalition ever among those nations.
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are the countries that has very stable in all factors.
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Sentence: Secondly, education; this factor is very important to support all factors in the future, this factor also will determining how the civilization will evolve in the future.
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Sentence: Thirdly, trade; this factor become very important to support industries in the development nations, the help in investment and working relationship will support economic development in all those development nations.
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Sentence: There are several accident happen according to the history, one the poor nations really developed, they even make a strict regulation in all of segment.
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