Globalization is a phenomenon that is changing the world we live in. Not the Earth per se, but the way we live in it. The way people communicate to each other and the transports goes from a place to another makes a huge change in the society behavior. Some people think that this fact will lead to a loss of cultural identity and they fear that. I think that we can find pros and cons in this phenomenon.
On one hand, the increasing of technology approach people everywhere in the globe. Nobody can deny it advantages. Evereything seems faster and never in the history of humanity it was so easy to get in contact with someone in another place, even in another country. For example, we do not need anymore to send a letter - that spends weeks to arrive at the destination place -, like people used to do some years ago, to say you love and miss someone. Actually, you can send a message on the facebook or use the smartphone to make a call.
Globalization also makes people feel like there is no borders between them. The world is becoming so connected that you can sleep in a place and wake up in another or you can buy something made in China, paying on the Internet with credit cards, and receive the object in the same week. 239
On the other hand, these facts, although seems to be amazing and interesting, it also can lead a loss of cultural identity. With all the world connected in, as if there is no barrier between the different costumes, people may confuse on which is own and which is others. Some people feel like there is no more distance between different culure, and they fear a loss of cultural identity.
To sum up, there are advantages and disadvantages on the phenomenon knows as Globalization. Personaly, I think the advance of technology is much better and I don't think it is something to fear, because it is part of the human development and evolution.
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