People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This made our lives generally more comfortable but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This made our lives generally more comfortable but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

Over the past thirty years, many companies have sold products in the market place. People work very hard to fulfill all their basic needs. Here in Indonesia, people buy all commodities both from domestic or international market. Although there are many benefits of using new products, I would argue that it could bring negative effects in traditional cultures to consider.

Firstly, the increasing of creative sectors give high income to the government. Then, people can work in many sectors. The cost of products which use modern technology is cheaper rather than using traditional tools. As a result, the ability of societies to purchase the latest product will increase dramatically. People seem happier than previously because they could get newest gadget. In addition, many international companies come to Indonesia to invest their product. The economy in developing country could increase steadily.

Secondly, there are some disadvantages from this phenomenon. People tend to more consuming than three decades ago. Using modern product also give bad effects for the local commodity. The awareness of support local product –include values and customs- decrease slightly. If governments do not give large place for domestic products, the international products could be the primary choice for the majority of societies.
In my opinion, the government should held festivals several times each year. With many exhibitions ,`local products can be promoted in the market place. In addition, by held a festival, government combine imported commodity but still keep local heritage.

In conclusion, purchasing international products could give benefits and disadvantages. It is a vital, therefore, for a government to protect local product which have values and customs by held regular festival.

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