question: some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people,while others believe that the purpose of museum is to educate.discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Museum is considered to be a depository for collecting and displaying and displaying objects having scientific,historical or artistic value.Many people have the opinion that a museum should stand only for imparting information, whereas some others assert that it should be an amusement area to make people happy. To my mind, an acceptable museum is something which satisfies both educational as well as aesthetic need of an individual, irrespective of their gender,age and believes.
Firstly, a museum is the best information reservoir of the past. It brings tremendous opportunities for us to have an insight about prehistoric life by seeing the exhibited specimens.Precisely, learning something by seeing is much more efficient and that glues to our memory for permanently than learning by reading books. For example, prehistoric stone sculptures or certain tools which are showed in a museum passes on great information to the visitors to have a significant insight of those things than that of reading of those online or on books.This is the reason why many people asserts to restrain museum as only a means of educational tool by governing its importance on imparting knowledge.
On the contrary, the argument of seeing a museum as a means of amusement is also to be discussed. Because, the specimens which are exhibited in a museum can have great artistic value and those can make people entertaining to a great extend.For instance, an old drawing of Leonardo da vinci or Raja Ravivarma,has great aesthetic value and which is adorned on the wall of a museum can bring about great joy to the visitors.
Finally, it seems to me that, both the arguments which are listed above have its own importance regarding the concept of a museum. So a museum should be an institution which is for both education and for entertainment. Why because the visitors of different gender,age and interest are equally satisfied by the use of a museum. Moreover, the hike in the number of visitors can provide the museum more lively and also provide a significant proportion of revenue for further modification of the museum.Thus it should attract more people of various places by fulfilling their needs to a very large extend
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