Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after citizens themselves?
In recent 20 years, some countries have been transforming into developed countries, such as China, Japan and Singapore but many other countries have not been transforming at all and still being poorer countries. We are not living alone in this earth and need a hand from others. From this phenomena, I would like to argue that wealth nations have to share the hands to the poorer countries because many of them take advantages from the weakness and poorer countries also cannot stand by themselves but need something that can boost them up.
Firstly, in this era, many wealth countries take benefit...
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