Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that humans were inevitably of mistake, foremost things which related impact from their waste and helpful activity too. Some people believe that the Earth nowadays has become a worrying place because many aspects were influenced this case. I had several reasons both sides of the issue.
On the one hand, the people who believe this damages say that we must blame on human activity. In there plenty incorrect humans manners were invented in this way, and the Earth damages may destroy humans too. Indeed, possibly even being time-bomb for all life creature inside the Planet and include the environment. Furthermore, the humans who are as harm sourcing never aware on the whole Earth contents for their next life survival. For instance, Borneo's rain forests nowadays is the most damage region and as consequence thousands animals have been extinguish. Therefore, they support that it is true which the Earth being harmed by bad human activities.
On the other hand, others had own sight that humans activity have huge affectionate in created good environment. Not all person In my hometown, Palembang, have advanced machines and our life being comfortable than before, we have more chances to approach the nature. The government's who are constantly providing fund and supporting event which was related basically on their programs for reaching the city aspire. As a result, my city achieved Adipura trophy as a cleanest city. So, this achievement is a great success and the Palembang societies should be proud of it, include myself.
To summarize, I personally can recognize among these people. That human activities bring the Earth many damages and should consider carefully before doing something to minimize bad effects. And always ceaseless efforts to protect the environment for the future generation of the Earth.
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Sentence: On the one hand, the people who believe this damages say that we must blame on human activity.
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Suggestion: Refer to damages and say
Sentence: Therefore, they support that it is true which the Earth being harmed by bad human activities.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace true with adverb
Sentence: On the other hand, others had own sight that humans activity have huge affectionate in created good environment.
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Suggestion: Refer to humans and activity
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