Some People Think That Parents Should Teach Children How to Be Good Members of Society.Others , However, Believe That School Is the Place to Learn This.
Almost in every country governments are trying to enhance the condition of their society. To fulfill this objective they believe each individual need some preparation before joining the society, now the question is what approach ought to be taken? Some people believe this has to be carry out through parents within families, and in contrary some other people more believe on the role of school, and they say this aim has to accomplish by school. I will discuss both ideas in following.
First of all, about the role of parents to prepare children, I believe children are highly influenced by their...
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Sentence: To fulfill this objective they believe each individual need some preparation before joining the society, now the question is what approach ought to be taken?
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Sentence: Nonetheless, everyone knows that in whole the world no one care about children more than their parents, hence, I believe parents put more effort to avoid that their children become an incompatible member of community.
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