The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four Europian countries.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four Europian countries.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart shows the type of spent six consumer goods in Germany, Italy, France and Britain. he good things by consumer is personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, Toys, and Photographic films. This things is famous for consumption by consumer.

The consumer in Britain spent much money for photographic films. And follow by France in the second country, which is the consumer spent much money for photographic film. Britain and France consumer spend their money until more than 160 thousand pounds sterling. Germany and Italy did not spend much money for photographic film. They just spend less than 160 thousand pounds sterling.

The 2nd place of spent on consumer goods is still Britain consumer. Britain spend much money also for toys. Italy and France has spent money also less than 160 thousand pounds sterling. This shows that France decreasing consumption in toys than photographics films. But, for Italy consumer shows that increasing consumption in toys than all. Germany follows Italian and Germanian shows increasing consumption in toys than all of consumption good things.

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Sentence: The chart shows the type of spent six consumer goods in Germany, Italy, France and Britain. he good things by consumer is personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, Toys, and Photographic films.
Description: The fragment personal stereos , is not usually preceded by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to he and good

Sentence: This things is famous for consumption by consumer.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to This and things

Sentence: Britain and France consumer spend their money until more than 160 thousand pounds sterling.
Description: The fragment consumer spend their is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace spend with verb, past tense

Sentence: Britain spend much money also for toys.
Description: The fragment Britain spend much is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace spend with verb, past tense

Sentence: This shows that France decreasing consumption in toys than photographics films.
Error: photographics Suggestion: No alternate word

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

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Score: 3.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 13 10
No. of Words: 173 200
No. of Characters: 896 1000
No. of Different Words: 73 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.627 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.179 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.484 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.144 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4