The map below is the town of Garsldon. A new supermarket (S) is pleend for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
In the town of Garlsdon would be built a new supermarket. There is 2 gorgeous which are pointed by S1 and S2. Both of spots have several advantages and disadvantages that would be selected and reported the main features in the next paragraph.
First of all, it is clear that S1 spot is located outside from the town. If we look at the map, S1 can be reached for about 30 minutes from both industry areas. The position has a disadvantages for people who live away from Garlsdon city like the Bransdon and the Cransdon. Because of it, people would be doubt to travel to first spot due to distance but there can be established a huge parking area and the first spot can be reached easily and there is access for both transportations.
Secondly, S2 is right in the town centre and we can arrive in the last spot by train or car. This spot is very strategic because of located in the heart of town and industry both of its side. People who come from another town go through the supermarket more closely than S1 and it is the another advantages. About no traffic zone in town centre, it could be solved by building a terminal or station. Thus, there is an obvious link between industry areas, railway, main roads brings a lot of advantages for supermarket.
Overall, in my opinion, the supermarket is better in the second spot due to several benefits.
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In the town of Garlsdon would be built a new supermarket.
Description: what is the subject for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
There is 2 gorgeous which are pointed by
There are 2 gorgeous sites which are pointed by
would be selected and reported the main features
would be selected and reported by the main features
The position has a disadvantages
The position has a disadvantage
Sentence: People who come from another town go through the supermarket more closely than S1 and it is the another advantages.
Description: The fragment town go through is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace go with verb, past participle
because of located in the heart of town
because it is located in the heart of town
it is the another advantages
it is the another advantage
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