the three diagrams below show the development of, and plan for, the coastal zone of Brightsea.Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the feature and make any relevant comparisons

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the three diagrams below show the development of, and plan for, the coastal zone of Brightsea.

Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the feature and make any relevant comparisons

The three diagram illustrate the change of, and blueprint of the coastal region of Brightsea since 1950 until now,and recent condition.

In the first diagram, there is no much building along the beach of Brightsea. At the middle of this area was located a circle building, Lighthouse, to south of it, is location of Lighthouse keeper's house. To the north of it, there is Jetty. It is fishermen's cottages at the end of the bay to south-east. Whilst, the second diagram show a plenty of change that will be built. The fishermen's cottages will be replaced with two different building, Restaurant and apartment. It will be built supermarket and parking lot at the west of circle building. The south of Brightsea there should be a resort complex which are hotel, sailing club, and ferry wharf that supported by telecommunications antenna.

Last diagram, the implementation of the blue print does not match with the fact. Ferry wharf has been build nearby east of lighthouse, the cottages changed to café, and there is only small shop at corner of three junctions. Only hotel has been built among three buildings based on the plan at the complex resort,. The road has been built to traffic in Brightsea.

To sum up, the implementation of the blue print of the Brightsea is not much changed since 1950 until today.

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Sentence: The three diagram illustrate the change of, and blueprint of the coastal region of Brightsea since 1950 until now,and recent condition.
Description: The fragment diagram illustrate the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace illustrate with verb, past tense

there is no much building along the beach of Brightsea.
there is no buildings along the beach of Brightsea.

At the middle of this area was located a circle building,
a circle building was located at the middle of this area,

the second diagram show a plenty of change
the second diagram shows a plenty of change

It will be built supermarket and parking lot at the west of circle building.
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Sentence: The south of Brightsea there should be a resort complex which are hotel, sailing club, and ferry wharf that supported by telecommunications antenna.
Description: The fragment resort complex which is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to telecommunications and antenna

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