The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourists facilities.
Given are particular two maps which represent the improvement of an island before and after the construction for tourists.
To begin with, before the construction, the island did not have any facilities and functions available for visitors at all. There were only a few palm trees in the east and west. The island was surrounded by sea and has a beach on the west.
Moving to the second map, many accommodations, a restaurant and a reception building have been built on the island. There are 15 tents came up after the constructions. Six tents were located surrounding three palms on the west side, while other tents built in central area. The restaurant has been constructed in northern part of the island and the reception area is in the central area. Another thing to note is that is a big pier in the south that has been built in order to provide areas for smiling.
Overall, after the construction, the island has changed significantly to be more convenient and become an awesome place to all tourists.
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There are 15 tents came up after the constructions.
There are 15 tents coming up after the constructions.
while other tents built in central area.
while other tents are built in central area.
flaws:
The second map is not developed well.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Different Words: 99 100
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 34 50
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
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Number of Paragraphs: 4 4