You are a student who wants to apply to Green Pines College. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment.Task: Write a letter to the Principal of the College, explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of fi

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You are a student who wants to apply to Green Pines College. You are experiencing financial problems at the moment.
Task: Write a letter to the Principal of the College, explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

I am Pratik Patel, writing this letter to inquire about financial aid or scholarship provided by Green Pines College to support my first year course fee.

I am recently graduated from Bharat College and want to do masters in computer science from your college. I had managed first year course fee from my savings and was expecting to enroll in the computer science course at your college. However, in the mean time, my father’s health got deteriorated and doctors advised to perform immediate operation to save his life. So to support my father and as part of my responsibilities, I gave all my savings to save his life. Because of this unavoidable incident, I do not have sufficient fund to pay my first year course fee.

I am very desperate to enroll in this course and for that I am trying hard to gather money to pay my course fee. Still it would be a great help if you can provide me some scholarships or other financial aids. I promise you that I will pay all my remaining fees by the start of next year.

Hope you will understand my problem and help me out in this difficult situation.

Yours sincerely,
Satish Patel

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