The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian people who did physical activity in 2010. Ages are divided into 6 parts and every part consisted of nine years.
From the data supplied, it is conspicuous that the proportions of women were higher than the proportions of men in all age groups except the age group 15 to 24. The peak proportion of men were between the years 15 to 24 and at that period, the percentage reached the 52.8%. After that point, the proportion started to decrease dramatically until the age group 45 to 54. After the proportion hit the bottom as 39.5% within the age group 35 to 44 , it started to increase and the percentage reached to 46.7% for the age group 65 and over. At that point, the proportions of men and women were almost same.
According to given percentages about women , the peak period was from the age of 45 to 54. Within the age roup 15 to 24, the percentage was 47.7% and it showed upward trend to the age group 55 to 64. Within the age group 35 to 44, the percentage differences between men and women was the maximum as 13%. After that, the percentage decreased to 47.1& for the age group 65 and over.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 945.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45754716981 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50452032594 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7034294362 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9090909091 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.181818181818 5.23603664747 3% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378300711948 0.215688989381 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15579350875 0.103423049105 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101750899178 0.0843802449381 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258328882563 0.15604864568 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048414345124 0.0819641961636 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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