the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by sjakhil on Sun, 08/18/2019 - 13:07

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of physical activity performed by the Australian men and women  belonging to different age groups.

 Overall, in the year 2010 the rate of regular physical exercise by male experiences a downward trend  while it shows an upward trend for their counterparts as they grew old.

In the age group of 15-24, the percentile of activity carried out by men is higher than the women with 52.8 and 47.7 respectively. However, the proportion of  physical activity declines to the lowest of 39.5% of males carrying out exercises regularly. Then it grows to 46.7% of males falling under age bracket of 65 and above working out.

On the other hand, in women the amount of physical activity surges from 47.7 percentile in the age group 15-24 to the highest 53.3 percentile in 45-54 age group. Nevertheless, it drops slightly to 53% for  women aging between 55-64, and plunges more to the entire-time low for the age group 65 and above and ends at 47.1%.

Finally, to conclude that the percentage of physical activity observed by the females increases considerably as their age progresses while in men it decreases substantially. 

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, nevertheless, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1083.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01666666667 4.92477711251 122% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.5006549592 2.65546596893 169% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638888888889 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.094979943 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.714285714 112.824112599 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.23603664747 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174642458622 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11925891427 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954251426211 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147576268559 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997068589877 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.2329268293 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.93 11.4140731707 157% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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