The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Write at least 150 words.

The diagram gives information about the rate of Australian men and women of various age groups who performed daily physical activity in 2010. The range of age group is from 15 to 65 and older.

Overall, it can be observed that the maximum percentage of Australian male who did regular physical activity among men belongs to the age class of 15 to 24,. Whereas, the least amount of daily physical activity were did by the age group of 35 to 44. The maximum and minimum number of Australian women belongs to age class of 45 to 54 and 65 plus, respectively. By observing it is understood that more Australian female did daily physical job than the male.

From the age group of 15-24, more amount of male does daily physical activity than other males, which accounts for 52.8% and it is the highest percentage among all males of all ages. The lowest percentage of men belongs to age group of 35 to 44 that is 39.5%.

In case of female, age class of 45 to 54 have most percentage (53.3%) of women doing daily physical activity. It is maximum among all male and female of all age groups. The least number of women doing physical activity belongs to 65 and older, which is 47.1%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... belongs to the age class of 15 to 24,. Whereas, the least amount of daily physical act...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
... amount of daily physical activity were did by the age group of 35 to 44. The maxim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 214.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52336448598 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39462159745 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415887850467 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.792731704 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 5.23603664747 12% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341499135713 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154817197529 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800937321638 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237735507953 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667410436224 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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