The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar charts illustrate the proportion of six various age group of male and female who engaged in physical exercise regularly in Australia by 2010. Overall, it can be clearly seen, Australia women did more exercise than men. However, except those who age 15-24, Australia men exercise exceed over female.

At first, from 15 to 24 years old, there are 52.8% male and 47.7% female. Then, in 25 to 34 period, both numbers are decreased to 42.2 and 48.9 percent and continue to decrease for men to the lowest point at 39.5% in 35 to 44 group. Whereas there was rise for female to 52.5% in same period.

Turning to age 45 to 54 group, which accounted for the highest percentage of female at 53.3% and remain stable to 55-64 group. Conversely, the proportion of men in 45-54 and 55-64 years old, comprised of 43.1, 45.1 percent respectively. Ultimately, Australia oldest male and female with regular physical activity had approximately the same proportion (47%) in 2010.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86144578313 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5535703319 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626506024096 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.967304541 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6666666667 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260023366163 0.215688989381 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997404358374 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907890728591 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164625031456 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105404236213 0.0819641961636 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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various age group of male and female who engaged in physical exercise regularly

various age group of males and females who are engaged in physical exercise regularly //add are

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various age group of males and females engaged in physical exercise regularly //remove who