The cart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Submitted by Nigaris on Sat, 01/07/2017 - 05:20

The pie charts compare the proportion of water used for industrial, agricultural and domestic purposes in six different regions across the globe.

It is evident that agriculture consumed the largest quantity of water in Asia , Africa and South America, while in Europe and North America industrial use of water was significant.

In terms of agricultural consumption of water ,Central Asia consumed the most (88%),followed by Africa and South East Asia ,for which figures stood more than the three quarters.Domestic and industrial use ,in contrast,remained low around 10% in these three regions.Water usage in agriculture sector in South America was fairly large, just below two-thirds of total consumption.However,domestic use accounted for about one fifth and industry consumed only 10 %.

Europe and North America used a large proportion of water,approximately 50% in industry. Agriculture accounted for more than a quarter of water usage ,whereas,domestic use remained below 20%.

Thus , in different regions the percentage of water consumption in the three sectors was variable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, third, thus, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7950310559 4.92477711251 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.82248019593 2.65546596893 144% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577639751553 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 129.310565006 43.030603864 301% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.5 112.824112599 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.23603664747 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174461577387 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110448680206 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428574295211 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119993076509 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441768812998 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.2329268293 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 61.2550243902 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.66 11.4140731707 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 11.4329268293 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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