The chart below shows the amount of money per person per week spent on fast food in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.Write at least 150 words.

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The chart below shows the amount of money per person per week spent on fast food in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by Afict on Tue, 07/23/2019 - 02:16

The bar chart given despicts the amount of money spent on fast food by Birtish per week and the line chart indicates the trends in consumption of fast foods.
The bar chart provides some information that high income groups spent the biggest amount of money per week on hamburger and pizza. And it should be noted that average income groups are willing to cost their own money on fish and chips. moreover, we can also see that expenditure on fish and chips is same between high-income and low-income groups.
In the line chart, we can clearly see consumption of the highest point during 20 years from 1970. moreover, there was a decrease trend in eating pizza from 1970 to 1985 and peak at 200 in 1985.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...cost their own money on fish and chips. moreover, we can also see that expenditure on fi...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...ighest point during 20 years from 1970. moreover, there was a decrease trend in eating p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 578.0 965.302439024 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 126.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5873015873 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.35036895883 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29061423645 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 163.8 283.868780488 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.7842960767 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268156149529 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129795742706 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158343620719 0.0843802449381 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209480023249 0.15604864568 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.174874420497 0.0819641961636 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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